Lotus Lullaby

Lotus Lullaby


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Commentary:

Reply Pochi, September 25th, 2011, 6:22 am

Thank you for being patient everyone T_T <3

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Discussion:

Reply mushroomtale, September 26th, 2011, 12:02 am

An update! *rejoices* *v*/// To be perfectly honest, I'm not exactly sure what happened in the second row -- did the glass from the frame break off? The body language the conductress make her come to life, absolutely. One last thing, the text on the last panel might be a little too small? *squint* >x< Looking forward to your next update, Love! <333

Reply Pochi, September 26th, 2011, 1:31 am

@mushroomtale: HELLO MY DEARRR <33 Oh shoot I can see what you mean. The statue breaks because of the music. I took out the background to make the breaking clearer, should I add in the music notes to make things a bit more understandable? And yeah next page I'm going to make the dialogue boxes bigger. Thank you so much for the feedback <333 ;_;

Reply mushroomtale, September 26th, 2011, 4:01 am

@Pochi: Oh, I see it now! I see, I see... I was wondering if would you consider putting maybe a tiny SFX like "crack" somewhere in the middle panel? I think that would be enough signal anyway... No problem, Dear! *hugs* Always a fan! <333

Reply Mr. Marple, September 27th, 2011, 6:18 pm

I agree with Mushroomtale, a little SFX in the middle row of panels would make whats going on clearer.

I have to say though that I'm in complete awe of your art style. Very well done.

Reply Amante, November 10th, 2011, 5:59 pm

I'm liking the character designs of this comic. Fave!

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